tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post1099192665154183539..comments2024-02-10T01:15:26.419-07:00Comments on <center>The Orange Jeep Dad's...blog.</center>: Regaining Faith by Macy Jones, LDS Missionary Serving in Lansing Michigan MissionRonhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06848643822308909132noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-9380533149186625362014-12-18T13:39:07.021-07:002014-12-18T13:39:07.021-07:00You go Girl! Even adults can relate to thisYou go Girl! Even adults can relate to thisAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-53449319885671422432014-12-07T08:09:04.110-07:002014-12-07T08:09:04.110-07:00The ability to Convey the healing of emotional tra...The ability to Convey the healing of emotional trauma through the use of Elohim's words is an everlasting Gift from Him. <br />Your daughter is filled with the Spirit of Hamach Messiah!<br />Praise Him. May she continue to be inspired by his gift that blesses others who read her stories. <br />shalom.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-70974961106103980872014-12-07T01:38:42.797-07:002014-12-07T01:38:42.797-07:00WOW !! ...just...WOW!!!WOW !! ...just...WOW!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-66872639515281397902014-12-06T20:55:22.140-07:002014-12-06T20:55:22.140-07:00And may I add, this is cross denominational...it c...And may I add, this is cross denominational...it could be applied to my (former) Catholic church, and any other denomination you can think of....I say clean it up and publish it! It will appeal to many! (and I don't mean 'clean' it of the Mormon references, I mean clean it of grammar/punctuation/change of POV issues...)Grammypreppernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-66256928093232392542014-12-06T20:41:32.254-07:002014-12-06T20:41:32.254-07:00Just wow...
I'm not going to offer editing id...Just wow...<br /><br />I'm not going to offer editing ideas, even tho I am a proofreader...<br /><br />I'm just blown away by the story...<br /><br />What concerns me is was this your daughter's experience with all your family's been through, or was this something she saw a friend go through? Prayers either way, without judgement...<br /><br />And I would say your daughter has found her 'niche'...if she enjoys it, encourage it! The depth of feeling, for a 15 year old blew me away!Grammypreppernoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-55458325697043818102014-11-30T11:33:44.962-07:002014-11-30T11:33:44.962-07:00Very good.The girls in young women's hit a cor...Very good.The girls in young women's hit a cord.There were cliches in young women's group when I was growing up,and they could be quite bitchy.If you weren'T part of their group, they would make you miserable.They are the reason I don't go to church anymore.I've tried to go back,but feel so uncomfortable that I can't .Unfortunatley bitchy girls grow up to be bitchy women,and it only take a few to ruin a church for people.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-76237235454115556502014-11-26T11:11:42.734-07:002014-11-26T11:11:42.734-07:00I’m very impressed that a 15 year old could write ...I’m very impressed that a 15 year old could write something like this.<br />I have a few constructive criticisms:<br />It needs proof reading, there are a few typos that appear throughout the document<br />She switches from the third to first person (She .. I) when talking about the main character. Either is fine but pick one and be consistent. <br />There are a number of times where the reader would benefit from a sentence to let them know there has been a scene change. She’s talking to Jeremy about going to church and the next sentence Steve is asking her a question. The reader would have benefited from “On Sunday morning as Sarah was heading towards the front door …” to clarify that the narrative has jumped. <br />Similarly when the schoolgirl accosts Jeremy at his locker.<br />But overall very good!<br />Survival Skveznoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-34710591821066609212014-11-24T13:26:47.925-07:002014-11-24T13:26:47.925-07:00Very well done. Your daughter has a gift to be abl...Very well done. Your daughter has a gift to be able to write like that and is wise for someone her age. It is a beautiful thing to have a faith like she does in this twisted World. You and your wife must be very proud of her.jimmyPxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18391857169034114989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7231305164855240671.post-19525911628649840722014-11-24T06:05:01.944-07:002014-11-24T06:05:01.944-07:00Your daughter has a rare and wonderful gift, and I...Your daughter has a rare and wonderful gift, and I sincerely hope she continues to express it. Her ability to turn one of the most well-known of Jesus' parables into a compelling narrative with such raw emotion is...beautiful. Bravo!Gerrethttp://www.gmpiv.comnoreply@blogger.com